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Muller

You wrote an amazing book! Since your work is so amazing, I would want to speak with you and offer some guidance, if that is alright with you.
Please PM me at @muller_chase094 on Instagram for further discussion.

Snapchat: @mullerchase1925; X: @Muller_Chase094
Keep up with @animes_094 on Discord.

2 months agoReply

Danielle Ferraro

Your sentence does a great job of setting up an engaging and immersive scenario, but it could be slightly refined for better flow and impact. Here’s a revised version with improved readability and suspense:
"The wise old woman from your village presents three colored power stones. You hesitate—once you choose, there's no turning back. Each stone holds immense power, capable of granting you extraordinary abilities, making you a formidable force against other stone wielders. Red, blue, or green… Which will you choose?"
This version tightens the wording, enhances the sense of urgency, and improves the overall readability. Let me know if you'd like any further refinements!

4 months agoReply

X Caliber

Thank you very much for your input. It's much appreciated. I would like to keep it the same only out of respect. This intro was taken directly from my submission to a subreddit page called r/writingprompts. That is where this story started. And now I have expanded on my idea and turned it into a novel. This concept however, started way back when I was in middle school in 2000.

4 months agoReply

Danielle Ferraro

@X Caliber, you are welcome. How did you connect to your active readers and audiences

4 months agoReply

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