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雨燃
好偏心的家庭，想起一句話：幸運的人用童年治癒一生，不幸的人用一生治癒童年🥲

小小小小小建議，有些對話框的標點漏了，你要不要補上，看起來感覺會比較整齊
10 months agoReply
非心
好喔好喔謝謝，逗號嗎?
10 months agoReply
非心
該怎麼說，主角其實挺單純的(在想怎麼不暴雷)
10 months agoReply
雨燃
@非心,句子最後的句號或感嘆號之類的～

看得出來主角是很單純的人，沒有遷怒於妹妹，甚至還有記住她的好(ó﹏ò｡)
10 months agoReply
非心
@雨燃,好喔好喔現在改

所以妹妹的死讓他挺痛苦的(我回去改時才發現我好像漏了段很小但重要的劇情😭感謝)
10 months agoReply
雨燃
@非心,💖

妹妹感覺也是很好的人╥﹏╥
10 months agoReply
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