I think it's a nice and tight little story! Although there are a few minor typos, the story is easily relatable and it seems to develop into an interesting plot line bit by bit towards the end! I would love to know how it all goes!:)

I found that Enrique is a Spanish boy's name meaning 'Ruler of the Home' - was it a specially intended detail? I think it fits in quite well with the story!

Looking forward to the ending!:)