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Comments - 死亡 x Flag | Penana

Comments - 死亡 x Flag

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然後…有種看著別人的故事在走的感覺…太深奧了…不過，他是看著故事在走沒錯啦！（我都不知道我在解釋什麼亂七八糟的東西了…看不懂就算了吧！直接公布名次吧！）

6 years agoReply

不算送死吧？畢竟主角認為故事會照著原來的路走

6 years agoReply

我想想能怎麼改

6 years agoReply

m…很深奧

6 years agoReply

綜合整個故事算是簡要可愛，而且有扭轉童話的結局～
不過立Flag那句話不是那麼好，不是很自然，有「刻意送死」的嫌疑(?)
明明是第一人稱了，還是有種看著別人故事在走的感覺......

6 years agoReply

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