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糖呢就兩茶匙
這結局……真的有點出乎意料呢Σヽ(ﾟД ﾟ; )ﾉ
第三段的「一口同聱」，應該是「異口同聲」~
只是小小建議～第四段，因為香港沒有埤塘這個說法，所以我稍為google了一下，但看照片埤塘好像面積都挺大的哦～改成水池會不會更好？
1 year agoReply
北織羽
改了~謝謝建議(⁠｡⁠･⁠ω⁠･⁠｡⁠)⁠ﾉ⁠♡
1 year agoReply
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