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夏語天
我說的話可能會讓你不開心，不過這只是我一點小小的建議。我覺得你的贅詞有點多，一段話裡面有很多重複的詞，這樣似乎會讓人看的有點膩，而且會感到混亂，所以可以的話改一下會比較好w
當然，這只是我的主觀看法，你不用一定照做w
3 years agoReply
森羽
Ok，到15章好像也還在好幾年前的文筆
那邊是真的需要修改😂
不會不開心啦😂
3 years agoReply
夏語天
@森羽,那就好~
3 years agoReply
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