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謝謝參加創作挑戰啊！這作品節奏明快，一開場就見到主角與彈琴老人互相對歭，但我閱讀能力低，請問二人為何要打呢？有人偽裝成糖水小販那段倒是嚇倒我了，這世界是不是太恐怖？JoJo？XDD

我有個超小小的想法啦，文中擬聲詞很多，有點重覆，既然是打，又在竹林，或許可以試試用背景的物件弄出聲音來代替？像是老人拉倒竹樹，竹葉沙沙作響之類，當然若這是這篇文的風格也沒問題，一起努力加油吧（灑竹葉）

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