Its not well done if there are grammatical mistakes. Where are the mistakes?

@Bengolong,I meant the overall storyline is done well.



The mistakes are kind of all over. When quoting someone, you need to make sure you have a comma/period/exclamation point/question mark after the quote, but before the closing quotation marks. Examples-

"He told me to do it," I said.
"Can you believe that?" I asked.
"He did it!" I exclaimed.
"Now we are in for it." I took my phone out of my purse.


Also, just to have correct grammar, (and someone can correct me on this if I am wrong) when a personal pronoun is the subject of the sentence, it is "I" not "me" and is used last if there are other subjects.

CORRECT- I went to the beach.

WRONG- Me and John went to the beach.

CORRECT- John and I went to the beach.



Does that help?

@Bengolong, did I get your name right?

@Mia Flame, Whats wrong with saying "Me and" ?

@Mia Flame, No

@Bengolong, Well, Jason, I don't actually know. Why do we say "grab" and "grabbed" but not "spin" and "spinned". Don't ask me about the English language. It is what it is.

@Mia Flame, I say spinned. And stop giving me lame names. 

@Bengolong,You are supposed to say "spun", Colton.

@Mia Flame, I wont. I wont do it. Spinned all the way baby. Also its an insult that you think my names Colton. 

@Bengolong,sorry, kevin. I was kidding about colton. 

@Mia Flame, My names Saul. Saul Goodman. 

@Mia Flame, And did you know you have rights? Constitution says you do. 

@Bengolong,rights for what?

And it is good to meet you, James Morgan Mcgill. I’m Florence Pugh. 

@Mia Flame, I didn't think you would get the reference. 

@Bengolong,There’s a thing called Google. Comes in handy with things like this.

@Mia Flame, You googled the name as soon as I said it? What kind of psycho are you?

@Bengolong, You are the one who wrote the story about the cannibal. Wierdo.

And yes. I am that type of person. I stalk people every chance I get.


Why didn't I think of this before- Johnny!

@Mia Flame, My names actually Trevor. Trevor Philips. 

@Bengolong,Mr. Trevor, I don't mean to be rude, but could you please either wear a hat or get your hair cut? That's just a little gross.

Mr. Trevor, it's a pleasure. I'm Bella Swan.

@Mia Flame,Also, why did you bring the constitution into this?

@Mia Flame, Because until proven guilty I believe that every man woman and child is innocent. 

@Mia Flame, Ok you don't say that about Trevor lady. His hair is iconic. 

@Bengolong, Iconic- eeeehhhh. Cannibalistic- oh yeah.

@Bengolong,What does "innocent until proven guilty" have to do with this conversation? I'm confused.

@Mia Flame, What makes you think he's a cannibal. Now you're just being rude. 

@Bengolong,His hair.

@Mia Flame, He Is not a cannibal! https://youtu.be/MdynQPcMHYA

@Mia Flame, https://youtu.be/gjvOMoDf4-4

@Bengolong,I'm not going to tap on either of those. who knows what kind of virus you're trying to put into my laptop.

@Mia Flame, Its a YouTube link. You can paste it into the search bar of YouTube and the first result will be the video. 

@Bengolong,Still, I don't want to watch whatever you are watching. Probably something about cannibals.

@Mia Flame, One of them is Saul Goodman the other is Trevor. I promise you can trust me that Trevor does nothing wrong.

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@Mia Flame, Saul's a lawyer. 

@Bengolong,aka cannibal

@Mia Flame, Trevor's the cannibal. Saul is just a sleazy lawyer with a comb over. Go look up Saul Goodman on YouTube that's all he is. 

@Bengolong,Saul is not the cannibal. Trevor is. 

@Mia Flame, Yes. But they never show Trevor doing cannibalistic things. Its just implied. There's a scene where he's throwing up and he goes "Aughh! Never eat Indian... People"

Then there's a scene where someone turns down a bowl of his stew because there's an eyelid in it and he goes. "What's wrong with you? Its just an eyelid. Probably not even human"

Then he eagerly starts chowing down on the stew. 

@Bengolong,I did not need to know that.

@Mia Flame, There's a lot more to his character than being a cannibalistic, drug abusing, violent madman. He's loyal. He rarely if ever lies. And he cares about his friends. 

@Bengolong,didn't ask. don't care.

@Mia Flame, The problem with you. Is that you judge people just because they do deplorable acts against humanity. 

@Bengolong,I was completely kidding. I don't know who either of those guys are. I looked them up and literally saw the first picture that came up. and yes, I have no problem judging fictional character.

@Mia Flame, You dare judge a book by its cover?

@Bengolong,yes, henry.