Loved the interaction between Logan and Adam. It added an extra level of intrigue. The whole family dynamic is a staged performance. Not just between Adam and Aurora, but also with Logan. It really begs the reader to question what in the world is going on, and for what purpose. Very well done. :)



One quick note. I noticed in chapter two that when they were discussing the price of the game, you wrote the prices as $15 and $60. When writing a story, you need to write out numbers in words. So, instead of writing $15, you would write "fifteen dollars". Nothing major, but I just wanted to point that out.