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夜沐
哇哇，好緊張，敵人追在屁股後面跑的感覺😰

不過飛船升空時爆炸了一下，那邊我沒有看懂，是披風裡面塞了手榴彈嗎？還是放了什麼陷阱呢？😳
2 weeks agoReply
星雨夜
那個就是亞瑟希望札克能注意到的事，他事先設下的炸彈的引爆開關。

光會比聲音與震波快，所以都會先看到光，接著才是衝擊波。會不會太硬了點XDDD
2 weeks agoReply
夜沐
「他喘著氣抬起頭莎雅的天空矇上又黑又厚的雲層」，如果改成「他伴隨著喘息將目光仰起，卻見厚重的烏雲籠罩整個莎雅的天空」，會不會比較順暢呢？

在氛圍上也能凸顯亞瑟烏雲蔽日的心理🌩️
2 weeks agoReply
星雨夜
感謝沐沐🥰
哎啊啊，怎麼少了逗點🤣🤣🤣
不過沐沐的建議也不錯，先抓入考量。
2 weeks agoReply
夜沐
@星雨夜
小聲說，我，我只是剛好路過，又多管閒事的閒雜人等🫣
2 weeks agoReply
星雨夜
@夜沐,沒事兒，這樣的事我也沒少幹XDDDD
2 weeks agoReply
原子能
連二號衛星反射的光線都無法從縫隙透進來->突然用二號衛星來舉例感覺怪怪的，是伏筆嗎？是人造的還是自然衛星？
3 weeks agoReply
星雨夜
能能竟然看到那顆了😱😱😱

不過它不重要，不是伏筆啦，就是一顆天然衛星。😜

我的伏筆位置通常都很奇怪🤣🤣🤣
3 weeks agoReply
大秦書說人
好像星際大戰，飛船還是沒飛出去啊，直接自爆自棄🫠
4 months agoReply
星雨夜
嘿嘿，大家都這麼說，殊不知……🤭
4 months agoReply
丘丘
誒？節流閥是啥呢（抱歉我學識淺薄XDD）
5 months agoReply
星雨夜
很正常，其實就是油門……

催下去啦～🤣🤣🤣
5 months agoReply
丘丘
@星雨夜,XD我還以為是什麼太空梭的裝置wwww
5 months agoReply
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