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夜臨 Yalin Hayami
這邊情感描述要比較纖細，可以參考一下編輯建議。
3 months agoReply
蘿蔔大學長
夜臨大大在感情戲上的細節和造詣熟練到有點扯！已經參考採納了不少！
3 months agoReply
夜臨 Yalin Hayami
@蘿蔔大學長,哇啊，聽你這麼說我很高興w

來到情感段落可以放慢腳步，多寫一點，如果只有描述畫面，在小說這個媒介會有點不夠力，而且會感覺少了點什麼。後面如果有類似段落，也能再自行檢查看看喔～
3 months agoReply
蘿蔔大學長
@夜臨 Yalin Hayami,ok!
3 months agoReply
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