/comment.php?chapter=5&id=89490
Comments - 桂花林 | Penana
arrow_back
Comments - 桂花林
info_outline
format_color_text
toc
comment 0
exposure_plus_1
Search stories, writers or societies
Show More Tags
Continue ReadingClear All
More
What Others Are ReadingRefresh
See more results for ""
X
Never miss what's happening on Penana!
Turn on notifications
Later
Login with Facebook or Sign up/Login to leave a comment.
蘭藍藍
不錯耶，雖然進度有點快，不過挺好看的
3 years agoReply
白鈴蘤
謝謝你阿 其實的自己也有這種感覺 
就～放着一段時間再看看能怎麼修吧
好像沒寫過這類型的～

也謝謝你來留言喔

3 years agoReply
蘭藍藍
@白鈴蘤,不會啦，妳文筆很好，我看得也很開心
3 years agoReply
白鈴蘤
@蘭藍藍,謝謝你阿 因為第一次練那麼長的 難免會有瑕疵XD 也謝謝你願意花時間 來看喔^^
3 years agoReply
蘭藍藍
@白鈴蘤,我覺得可能可以再多寫一點細節方面的描述，這樣可以讓速度放慢，也能讓讀者比較好融入


3 years agoReply
白鈴蘤
@蘭藍藍,嗯 讓我休息一下，再看看怎麼辦吧。
3 years agoReply
Back to Story
×
×
Write down what you like about the story
×
Reading Theme:

Font Size:

Line Spacing:

Paragraph Spacing:

Load the next issue automatically


Reset to default

X
×
x
Proceed

arrow_back
×
×

Install this webapp for easier offline reading: tap and then Add to home screen.