HERE IS MY PROPER REVIEW, It sounds like you where trying to make a rap within an alternative rock song then desided to make a clone to your favorite band causing confusing removing the context of the  song making it odd to try to hum to.

This song would work best as something similar to Hollywood but would require some more inventive changes to the chorus or doing what metal bands are know for doing and having slight alterations to how the lyric is done for example reaping half the line before doing the second half.

As for weather or not it meets the idea you described it half does your discretion is the extreme the song is the middle ground if you want to go with these themes used extreme. extragtions or metaphors like three days grace or apocalyptica 

SUMARRY 
the song is ok but is misleading in comparison to your discretion  and feel likes it wouldn't be able to fit a genre of music with ease causing its affect to drop.

  

So, this makes me think of something like Risk, how you have all the pieces on the board, multiple armies or "teams", except a real world Risk, like how there's stories about people getting pulled into video games, this would be the board game version of something like Sword Art Online.

This was a refreshing story real review coming 2017