I feel copied for some reason. sus 🤔 (JK, each person has their own opinion)

I liked it though.  I feel like you tried your hand at rhyme and tried to free style at the same time, which kind of makes it lopsided per se. And before someone tells me of how poems are written, I know.  They can/are a form of freedom, but I personally feel like you can't try and mix something like rhymes or haikus (which do have requirements) into freestyle.

I'm not a perfect poet, but it does make an un-scratchable itch. That said, I think your poems can truly become something if you worked on it. I can't wait to see the next.