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第一章投票！交換閲讀心得！獲得大量P幣！
ENTRY #28
Author: 艾米莉
Published:
Jul 3, 2023
第一章投票！交換閲讀心得！獲得大量P幣！
Published:
Jul 3, 2023
ENTRY #28
[投票組] 投新的一票
Author: 艾米莉
Published:
Jul 3, 2023
1 Min Read
126 Words
No Plagiarism!CLWguIhm58BxIzdkGWJVposted on PＥNAＮＡ
 黑正大好，我投新的一票。443Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡvEjt93yRdV
環境描寫443Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡC2mz1QzMcz
新的第一章在環境描寫的加筆令畫面感更強烈。
情感塑造443Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡrnusZXH27e
情感塑造上新版本也比舊文章細緻，細寫對話和神態，更能感受到男主的糾結。443Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ8uDO7hdoHa
場景的緊張度
在舊的文章中，兩人立於樓梯上遙遙對望令人有點尷尬。新版本中更緊密的身體碰撞更能營造張力。443Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡfmxFleXpcj
以上是我小小的感想。443Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡETMJlUilhd

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