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交響J評文/心得專欄
ISSUE #22
Author: 交響J
交響J評文/心得專欄
Author: 交響J
ISSUE #22
【光影相織】評文2
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其實很想問作者，這一部故事的主軸是甚麼？是要寫男女主的相愛還是要寫......恩......想不出來。

缺點的部分在上一次已經提過了的，這邊就不贅述。這邊主要的問題就是看不出來故事是想要表達甚麼？來導致有這麼多的劇情產生。

必須要誇獎的是，作者利用主角之間的互動來推動世界觀跟背景，這樣的寫法讓人能很快能沉浸在劇情裡，我覺得非常好。

母親的過世，家人們的反應也書寫的讓人感同身受。腳色們有立體起來。

就是回憶表演那一段占的份量太重了，看得有點不耐煩，但是文字表達上是非常好的。

其餘的部分就需要作者解說一下故事主軸表達中心是甚麼了。

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Last updated: Jul 7, 2025
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