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交響J評文/心得專欄
ISSUE #6
Author: 交響J
交響J評文/心得專欄
Author: 交響J
ISSUE #6
【星軌】評文
No Plagiarism!YcH37hBd4AJUzTQ9E5eZposted on PＥNAＮＡ

優點：寫作手法成熟、用詞表達精確、故事架構完整

交響私語：坦白說看完序章1，我很難再接下去看序章2。

因為實在枯燥，我看不出這故事的主軸重心

很多人寫長篇或是大長篇，都習慣先把整個設定跟世界觀丟出來(不管以什麼樣的方式丟)，認為不這樣子，作者就無法講故事，讀者也會不清楚故事在幹嘛(但其實根本不會)

所以可能就是作者編排劇情的問題，把沒必要的劇情安排太多，或是根本沒有重點

因為安排劇情鏡頭，不是單純只要給個畫面講故事，而是要有意義，不然只會消耗讀者的記憶體跟耐心

最後，感謝您分享這部作品，我們所有的建議都是僅供參考，不要太放在心上喔。^^

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Last updated: Jul 1, 2025
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