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交響J評文/心得專欄
ISSUE #8
Author: 交響J
交響J評文/心得專欄
Author: 交響J
ISSUE #8
【海棠青塚】評文
No Plagiarism!pPZNsqGnx6qYrQiRivgzposted on PＥNAＮＡ

小感想：屈少勤不是盞省油的燈，往後肯定更加有作為。與女主的互動輕巧的拉近距離，我覺得寫得很棒。

優點：寫作筆觸成熟、用詞精美、架構完整

缺點：人名真的有點太多。有時候會不知道誰是誰。

交響私語：其實我覺得作者的文字表現各方面都已經很成熟，已經不需要評文了，需要的是自我的突破，把每個場景的描述在多描述清楚些，提升畫面感，情感刻劃更深刻一些，我想這才是作者要自我突破得地方。41Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡo3fEAJYvLD
41Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡIqhCfyqXQ8
其他方面，無可挑剔了。

謝謝妳讓我看了一篇好文章。^^

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Last updated: Jul 2, 2025
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