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未來之夏野評
ISSUE #7
Author: 錦鯉萌狼
未來之夏野評
Author: 錦鯉萌狼
ISSUE #7
《異眸-羽心》野評
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合 https://www.penana.com/article/466950

為甚麼妳比星羽小，但是文筆比星羽好那麼多啊（羨慕）？

為何博士可以大搖大擺地帶走主角做人體實驗，為甚麼遮上眼睛身分就不能用了？沒有講得很清楚，但我覺得一個短篇故事確實是不需要把這些設定講得很清楚的。

在第四章主角被博士抓走之後，我覺得主角始終對事情接受得太快了，沒有太展現出恐懼、驚訝、反抗情緒，反而淡然地接受博士把她作為實驗材料，甚至將他銷毀。也許主角多一點反抗情緒或求生意志比較好。

但是14歲寫出這樣的故事，我認為很有天分，希望作者繼續精進。

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未來之夏野評
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Last updated: Aug 23, 2020
Total word count: 3,421
Total reading time: 11 Minutes
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