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交響J評文/心得專欄
ISSUE #17
Author: 交響J
交響J評文/心得專欄
Author: 交響J
ISSUE #17
【青春賣給8-9-命賠給人生】評文
No Plagiarism!TmBazKH47UYDnOiZwwoHposted on PＥNAＮＡ

我很喜歡看這類型的作品，現實的冷漠與殘酷，造就了男女主角如今的性格與模樣，相當的令人心疼，也相當的讓人想知道接下來會發生甚麼事情，不知不覺就看到第六章了。

優點：行文流暢、邏輯分明、寫作模式成熟、劇情安排得當

交響私語：

我知道畫紅色字或是加粗黑字，是作者想要強調的部分。但是事實上而言，對讀者沒有差別，請不要再繼續用這種方式，不正規、會有點降低檔次。58Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡo2dDgM51Z7
58Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡAFVWDAsx8I
其實現在的文筆已經很條理清晰，不過我覺得還有上一層樓的機會，這個部分就要靠作者的自我突破。58Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡQwlJRUnZxC
58Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ4mDYn90y3q
​​​​​​​其餘的部分，我覺得沒有大問題，還蠻好看的。主線一脈相傳的連綿下去，讓人會一章接著一章看。

以上，謝謝你分享作品，建議都只是僅供參考，還請勿放心上。^^

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Last updated: Jul 7, 2025
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