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交響J評文/心得專欄
ISSUE #5
Author: 交響J
交響J評文/心得專欄
Author: 交響J
ISSUE #5
【出租女友】評文
No Plagiarism!L21EQNeBIYawD1URHYd6posted on PＥNAＮＡ

小心得：

小勇真的好可憐，整篇圍繞著性別認同感展開熱烈的劇情，小勇對成為女性的渴望、生為男性時的絕望無助與徬徨，都寫得很深切令人動容。

優點：故事架構完整、主題立意明確、寫作手法成熟很清晰的表達了每個畫面，讓人感同身受

交響私語：

由於我個人閱讀喜好的緣故，都會勸作者在文筆上能再精進一些，我會看得比較快樂。XD

另外覺得遺憾的就是結尾，收尾的太快速了，應該要針對後續處理再多一些描述然後慢慢銜接入作者想說的話。

所以有點虎頭蛇尾的感覺

最後，感謝您分享這部作品，我們所有的建議都是僅供參考，不要太放在心上喔。^^

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